A War with Death

(Debut of New Structured Poetry)
Santosh Kumar Pokharel

I am sitting under the open sky
And thinking I’ve come here, why
What’s the purpose of life here?
Offspring, why do here appear?
Who has these manners taught?
How sweet it sounds when one calls
I’m his grandpa.

In his speech, I take a glee
His love makes my troubles flee
I turn happy, and my tears shine
And I forget all about whine.
I know no one will follow me
As none was with me when I came.
I none became.

And how of love I’ve acquired
Would you love to turn old and then get tired?
My memories, my knowledge, then
My pride and self-respect will remain.
Where? glory to all my creations
Will manifest how? this, I guess.
Is all worthless?

One thing I still don’t understand
Why follow his cruel command
I’ve come from my mother’s womb
Then why go to an unknown tomb
Without her permission?
Death isn’t true but a fraud and fake.
Remain awake!

O’ death, your punishment awaits!
For robbery, this is your fate.
Bring the mothers back to life
And ask them all if they permit
You take kids in their presence.
They’ll revolt and shatter your chains
Moms of children.

I know how to stop you and sway
And free them from being taken away
I’ll have a fierce war with you then.
You shall, too; much alert remains!
My love, memory, and self-respect
On their strength, I’ll wage a war.
You come prepared!

[Santosh Kumar Pokharel is a multilingual international poet from Nepal. Pokharel is a global poet of our time. He has introduced a purely new structure in poetry composition where the last line of a stanza is half the length of the proceeding line. This concluding line of the stanza is informative, suggestive, or imperative based on the content of the stanzas. Poet Pokharel’s Debut with this writing style has found a place in his recent publication, THE WAR & OTHER POEMS, under the title A NEW POEM. The writer in six languages has published his six poetry collections so far. He has many poems about human hunger, love, and world peace. His poems touch the hearts of the readers and leave them emotional, as said by the critics. Pokharel is an ardent and globally well-known world peace activist whose antiwar poems have been translated into many languages of the world’s peoples. His latest book, THE WAR & OTHER POEMS, draws the attention of many. Winner of the title of the World Poet and the World’s Golden Writer, Pokharel is a poet, translator, polyglot essayist, and lyricist.]

Poetry Review by Dr. Joseph S. Spence

This is an awesome poem by Santosh Kumar Pokharel, a multilingual poet from Nepal, regarding “Death for a War.”

It is thought-provoking and flows very well. The images cast a shadow on life and correspondingly move through each stanza reverently.  The rhyming pattern varies in each stanza with a different twist of the couplet forms (two lines rhyme) and tercet forms (three lines rhyme). The questioning technique draws the reader into the lines to better understand the theme, essence, rhyming scheme, and action verbs of “Death and War!”

The corresponding action statements are vivid and flow very well.  For example, such as sitting under the sky and why? This puzzling position is a state of loss and thought-provoking. It shows a need for a sense of responsibility, which is absent. This leads to a tirade of questions, seeking answers, and Grandpa comes to the rescue. These last two lines are the essential parts of the poem “New Poetic Structural Invention.” This structured invention of the seven lines “septet” pattern resonates in all six stanzas, scribed uniquely by the author.

The binary opposition “happy tears” in the second stanza invokes a pattern of being alone, thus leading to a birth’s proclamation of coming into the world alone. Such a poignant statement regarding time! Additionally, the questioning technique used regarding love is intriguing, thus corresponding with the poignancy of time. This vibrancy enhances the poetic theme!

The interrogatory use of love acquired turns tired, interlaced with the metaphor of self-respect loss, enhanced the emphasis of “Worthlessness!”

The author displays a vivid mantra of tone and tenor regarding his mother’s womb, from when he came, and challenges the evil omen of “Death!” One that is irresponsible and uses dissonance to emphasize its fakeness and remain awake like the hyperbole of being a fraud of taking others’ belongings without permission.

More metered words are injected, such as “Punishment your fate,” which attest to death’s evilness in a diabolical rhyming pattern in the next to last stanza. The symbolism of “Mother’s return” leads to the action words of “Revolt” shattering the chains of death, thus bringing freedom to Mom’s children.

The final stanza brings a springboarding analogy from the poetic essence thought-provoking theme. This presents a direct pronouncement to the antagonist of the fate awaiting its emergence.

This dynamic poetic presentation leads to another binary opposition of “Love-War.” This ends the poetic narrative on a dynamic note of the literary pronouncement theme and the poetic architecture construction:
“On their strength, I’ll wage a war.
You come prepared!

This is a magnificent narrative by my brother and poetic author, Santosh Kumar Pokharel.

[USA Goodwill Ambassador (appointed by USA 42nd President, William Jefferson Clinton), Professor Dr. Joseph S. Spence Sr. Epulaeryu Master. President of High Disciplinary Council, World Union of Poets-Italy, and Literary Thought Leader Golden Key International Honor Society.]